Goofy song

[Brontosaurie]

http://picosong.com/QP9W/

What do you think?

 

[Helvete]

I liked it. The transition at .47 is very abrupt though as if it doesn't really belong. I would develop it further and bring in more ideas, either abrupt or casually and/or reintroduce similar ideas from the beginning. As it stands it's seems very incomplete yet a solid building block to work from.

 

[Brontosaurie]

I liked it. The transition at .47 is very abrupt though as if it doesn't really belong. I would develop it further and bring in more ideas, either abrupt or casually and/or reintroduce similar ideas from the beginning. As it stands it's seems very incomplete yet a solid building block to work from.

Thank you.

You are right, there is an error at ~00:47

Will be bringing in more clubbing beats and then clubbing piano (percussive, treble) also and then r'n'b ballad finale (boooming sub basses and chords), that is the plan.

 

[Ex-User (9086)]

Melody for piano is agreeable. Beats were somewhat off-putting and out of place, it's like smashing two songs together without logical transition between.

Samples were goofy/flat, maybe replacing them with something deeper/better sounding is a good idea.

Song needs to be extended, get some common theme going on (the melody repeats in both parts but it doesn't connect the whole with only that), overall good but still fragmented concept.

 

[TheManBeyond]

i like it man, just don't follow critics, fuck them, follow ur vision, that's all that matters.
the transition is good for me, that's the agressive go nuts in the mosh pit part, there's no caution sign that guides the blind lamb, he just falls.
only thing i noticed is the lack of a more professional sound but it's not a matter of the musical composition.

 

[Brontosaurie]

Melody for piano is agreeable. Beats were somewhat off-putting and out of place, it's like smashing two songs together without logical transition between.

Samples were goofy/flat, maybe replacing them with something deeper/better sounding is a good idea.

Song needs to be extended, get some common theme going on (the melody repeats in both parts but it doesn't connect the whole with only that), overall good but still fragmented concept.

Thank you Blarraun, i have adjusted the rhythm for piano in the transition and enhanced the transition to straight time.

The samples for piano sounds are rather arbitrary and placeholder, but i've got no good idea of what to replace them with... Will look into that probably.

 

[Ex-User (9086)]

The samples for piano sounds are rather arbitrary and placeholder, but i've got no good idea of what to replace them with... Will look into that probably.

Percussion sounds flat (lifeless) to my taste at least, piano holds up slightly better compared to the rest of your samples. Guitar/synth sounded fine.

Here's a site with a relatively comprehensive collection of sample sources, you might find something you like.

Though if you are still composing then I think it's fine to use whatever is supplied with the main program, it may be too much hassle to replace all of that on every step, it's more important to polish when you are done with it.

 

[groovytaxi98]

this is pretty much what all my music sounds like, so I can't really see any flaws.

wow I actually really like the ending... reminds me of something Infected Mushroom would do. @2:48
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XRufAykZPnE

^The extent of what comments I can give, considering my limited (musical) intelligence, and how quick the song went by. O. o

 

[Polaris]

I liked the seemingly chaotic format. It is quirky - very Brontosaurie. I liked the restlessness and drive of the second half. I think the second half reflects the first and does not seem disconnected at all. Iif you were able to expand upon the initial fragments and somehow make it into a fractal whole, it would be quite cool. Think Bach, Steve Reich.

If your goal was smooth transitions, easy listening, then maybe listen to some of the advice previously. However , if the goal is a story or a journey of sorts - a soundscape designed to invoke some vision, I think it works well - it just needs more work. There was nothing in it that I found disruptive to my ears, but then again I like a musical challenge - music to me does not have to be pretty or logical. I like things that invoke an atmosphere, and that atmosphere does not have to be like elk in the sunset, necessarily.

 

[QuickTwist]

I did not think the transition was abrupt on a second listen, it sounded quite natural.
The initial notes make me wonder where it is going, but it delivers pleasantly enough.
It lacks its quark the second time around and I am able to see what the feeling is well.