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The other is the betrayer.

Mr.Burke

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There was a man. He was misunderstood, beaten, oppressed, shaken, manipulated, betrayed, and exiled. Lying on the floor, his face was bloody and mutilated. In that scene, he suddenly understood. It all fit together. It was so simple this whole time, he knew it, but it seemed too obvious to say. And no one would listen still.

There was a man. He was a secretive man. People didn't know him, he didn't know people. A cloak was what he wore. He saw that man being beaten. He watched in silence. He saw when he was being lied to. He watched in silence. He saw what other people ran from, what they were addicted to, what they tried to erase. An observer. He was not one to share his findings. He saw a crying woman. He continued walking. He saw a misguided hooligan. He continued walking. He saw a fine American citizen, he continued walking. As he continued to observe these people existing in the world he strode through, he seemed to hear voices that were living in the wind. His pace became faster. He seemed to be running from something. There were kids playing in a field. There was a car with music playing. Someone said goodbye to their friend. He started walking faster, and faster. Eventually his walk became a jog. His jog a sprint. The world around him started to distort. He felt as if he was slowly ceasing to exist. He had never existed to begin with. This was a fact yet it was contradictory. He was clearly alive, and was in a real world. He looked at his hands and saw a stranger.

There was a man. That man went along in life as he saw fit. He did not feel the need to change what was right for him. But other people did not think that his life was right for him. It was not right for them, so it must not be right for him. Accepting the days with contempt. That's what he supposedly amounted to. You do what you want, as long as it does not involve me. That was the message he read on the wall. Though it was worst than that. And seldom better.

There was a man. One day he woke up. He didn't know where he was. He didn't know what was going on. He didn't get why he was here. Walking from where he awoke, he studied his environment curiously. Though he was walking through a schoolyard, there was not a child in sight, but there was someone looking away. He felt as if maybe this person could inform him of why he was here or where he was, so he eagerly approached the man. The man was wearing a cloak in spite of the broad daylight. He didn't seem to be a part of the place in which he was standing. Awkwardly, the man asked the cloaked figure if he could help him.

There was a man. That man fell to his knees that day. The cloaked figure turned and looked down upon him. The figure did not feel pity. He did not feel remorse. When the kneeling man looked up, he got a glimpse of the figure's face. It felt familiar to him. It was bleeding and badly cut. The kneeling man opened his mouth very slowly, as if to cry out in horror at what he saw. He wasn't able to make a sound. The cloaked figure did not permit him to. The cloaked figure fixed his hands around the submissive one's neck and looked into his eyes, and what he saw was always there without a name. But one thing was for certain. What he saw reflected in those eyes that day was not a man.


So tell me. What was reflected in those eyes?
 

Roran

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A sheep?
 

Ozymandias

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I see no other alternative.
 

warryer

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Fear. The man has become what he fears and he is just now realizing it. Lucky for him recognition is the hardest part.
 

GYX_Kid

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His shadow and manifestation of his past fear/hatred, something he could subconsciously relate to which he tried going to for an answer about something. Maybe he thought he could beat it and move past it, maybe something else
 

warryer

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I enjoy riddles. :confused:

It's not fear. I re-read this a few times and decided that it is about recognition.

I think the there are two different aspects of the same man. Kind of like Dr. Jekyll and Mr. Hyde. After looking at the thread title which, I paid no attention to before, I have another idea.

The two aspects of the same man are looking at each other face to face. They realize that they are actually part of the same whole. They occupy the same body and the man is coming to terms with the fact that he is not whole without these two pieces working together.
 

Cognisant

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Existential anxiety?

I get a strong sense of alienation from what you've written, of being an observer of the human race rather than a part of it, sentiments of pain and pride, of being lonely whilst being proud of being a loner.
 

Mr.Burke

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Existential anxiety?

I get a strong sense of alienation from what you've written, of being an observer of the human race rather than a part of it, sentiments of pain and pride, of being lonely whilst being proud of being a loner.

That is all part of it, but it's not what was reflected in his eyes.

What was reflected in his eyes was actually the "other".

He thought the other was part of himself, but in reality it was an aspect of his experiences of society that he took onto himself. To him it wasn't that society was bad, it was that he was bad. But then he realized that the real monster was not the man with the bleeding face. It was himself for demonizing everyone he met. Everyone became the betrayer, but he was the only betrayer. So who is the other, really?

At the very least, the self and the other are no longer the same. An evil committed by the other does not equate to an evil committed by the self.

To be more specific, it's the experiences of a paranoid personality disorder/schizoid type person and his supposed epiphany and new understanding.

While it was a battle of the self to him, it was really a battle against everyone else. So once he saw his mistake, that is what makes the ending of the story.

His mistake was not in failing to trust others, but failing to trust himself.

(I've repeated myself here, but I don't see a problem with it).
 
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