Some Songs I Made...

[Agent Intellect]

I uploaded these on some random site, so I'm not sure if they'll work - if they do, feel free to tell me what you think (this is the best I could do with a 20 dollar mic and a pirated version of CoolEditPro).

Anomie
Lyrics:

Spoiler

In the house? Mothafucker we locked out
Since five on the dot
The time when we clocked out
The DOW Jones stock down
Wall Street cop out
We losin' our jobs and our house now
We shout into the void
But ain't nobody hearin' ya
Shit's gettin old fast
Like it's got progeria
Complex inferior
Pointless like soccer games
Millenial Age Of Reason
Bringin' Thomas Pain
Method questionable
After you like the answer
Always on your mind
Like a deadly brain cancer
Revolutionary
Taken under my fathers left wing
Gotta take out the system
Like a hysterectomy
Before the infection spread
Infecting the seed
Like stories in porn
My value is limited
Since the day I was born
I could never fit in
Not your average citizen
Lacking initiative
Burn politicians
Like albino's in the sun
Fuck guns
They create poverty just to spill blood
It haunts my being
Like the silent screams
Of a million aborted fetuses
From molested teens
The Popes a criminal
Propaganda subliminal
Cynical night timer interval
This shits got me rabid
Buster Casey calamity
When I reject reality
All that's left is anomie

Abandonment
Lyrics:

Spoiler

Verse 1:
Healthy with the sickness, sinfulness
Increase my fitness in minutes
Diminish the blank litmus
I was born giftless
Like Jews on Christmass
Blood thicker than water
Innate trait
From ape to my father
Sovereign phenomenal
Tooth and claw doctrine
Split the punctuated
Equilibria followin
Common man anonymous
Work to the bone
Divorcin' the past
Iconoclast
The man of the stone
Modifyin' memories
Flesh denyin' enemies
Post modernist optics
Relativistic imagery
Untouched ruptured
Foundational structures
Logical positivism
Unweaving the prism
Sew closed the worlds eye holes
The sky is fallin
Crush the opposition
Ideology clashin
Demonic teeth nashin'
Juxtaposition
Fuckin' the wisdom
Common sense rhetoric
Brittle egos congregate
The feeble stay celibate
Hazard the elements
Retaliate the sentiment
I shine light on your eyes
Blinded from television
Sell the vision of God
And abuse the trust
I point an laugh
While reality collapse
Reacts and erupts
I Split the ground of being
And clutch at the crux

Verse 2:
I'm not much to look at
But I'm all here
Put up with so much
It eat's at my telomeres
Act my age
And try to evade the grave
Between core and space
I pace the stage
I forgot my lines
But i know my place
Trapped in the maze
Rodent race
Adjacent from brains
Vanish without a trace
And leave my remains
Easily replaced
I fought the machine
And got my ass beat
Realigned my anatomy
At the factory I co-habitate
Amalgamate my day
In front of the screen
And serving my king
Worshiping things
Clipping my wings
And going full circle
Like Saturnal rings
I divide my day up
Into the nothing it's made of
And find myself in error
I can only play love
Between shades of despair
Casting shadows
On my shallow acts of repair
Declared dilapidated
Unfit for my own inhabitance
Non-combative pacifist
Sinnin' on the sabbath
I was aborted
Before bein' born again
Non-Christian
Non-tradition
Slave to endorphins
I got beliefs I hold ideally
But I won't go to war for them
A spiritual preemie
Absent a soul when they conceived me
Condemned to freedom
But no one had a hand in it
There was no one there to leave me
Just immediate abandonment

 

[ashitaria]

I can't access the file.

 

[Agent Intellect]

I can't access the file.

That's what I was afraid of... oh well.

 

[RubberDucky451]

That's what I was afraid of... oh well.

Oh well? come-on!

Zip them together and host them somewhere!

 

[The Frood]

add a picture and post as a youtube vid

 

[kantor1003]

Try uploading the files to yousendit.com or megaupload.com

What kind of music is it?

 

[Agent Intellect]

Trying this again on a different hosting site (SoundClick, I saw Kantor using it). Tell me if it works.

Anomie

Spoiler

In the house? Mothafucker we locked out
Since five on the dot
The time when we clocked out
The DOW Jones stock down
Wall Street cop out
We losin' our jobs and our house now
We shout into the void
But ain't nobody hearin' ya
Shit's gettin old fast
Like it's got progeria
Complex inferior
Pointless like soccer games
Millenial Age Of Reason
Bringin' Thomas Pain
Method questionable
After you like the answer
Always on your mind
Like a deadly brain cancer
Revolutionary
Taken under my fathers left wing
Gotta take out the system
Like a hysterectomy
Before the infection spread
Infecting the seed
Like stories in porn
My value is limited
Since the day I was born
I could never fit in
Not your average citizen
Lacking initiative
Burn politicians
Like albino's in the sun
Fuck guns
They create poverty just to spill blood
It haunts my being
Like the silent screams
Of a million aborted fetuses
From molested teens
The Popes a criminal
Propaganda subliminal
Cynical night timer interval
This shits got me rabid
Buster Casey calamity
When I reject reality
All that's left is anomie

Abandonment

Spoiler

Verse 1:
Healthy with the sickness, sinfulness
Increase my fitness in minutes
Diminish the blank litmus
I was born giftless
Like Jews on Christmass
Blood thicker than water
Innate trait
From ape to my father
Sovereign phenomenal
Tooth and claw doctrine
Split the punctuated
Equilibria followin
Common man anonymous
Work to the bone
Divorcin' the past
Iconoclast
The man of the stone
Modifyin' memories
Flesh denyin' enemies
Post modernist optics
Relativistic imagery
Untouched ruptured
Foundational structures
Logical positivism
Unweaving the prism
Sew closed the worlds eye holes
The sky is fallin
Crush the opposition
Ideology clashin
Demonic teeth nashin'
Juxtaposition
Fuckin' the wisdom
Common sense rhetoric
Brittle egos congregate
The feeble stay celibate
Hazard the elements
Retaliate the sentiment
I shine light on your eyes
Blinded from television
Sell the vision of God
And abuse the trust
I point an laugh
While reality collapse
Reacts and erupts
I Split the ground of being
And clutch at the crux

Verse 2:
I'm not much to look at
But I'm all here
Put up with so much
It eat's at my telomeres
Act my age
And try to evade the grave
Between core and space
I pace the stage
I forgot my lines
But i know my place
Trapped in the maze
Rodent race
Adjacent from brains
Vanish without a trace
And leave my remains
Easily replaced
I fought the machine
And got my ass beat
Realigned my anatomy
At the factory I co-habitate
Amalgamate my day
In front of the screen
And serving my king
Worshiping things
Clipping my wings
And going full circle
Like Saturnal rings
I divide my day up
Into the nothing it's made of
And find myself in error
I can only play love
Between shades of despair
Casting shadows
On my shallow acts of repair
Declared dilapidated
Unfit for my own inhabitance
Non-combative pacifist
Sinnin' on the sabbath
I was aborted
Before bein' born again
Non-Christian
Non-tradition
Slave to endorphins
I got beliefs I hold ideally
But I won't go to war for them
A spiritual preemie
Absent a soul when they conceived me
Condemned to freedom
But no one had a hand in it
There was no one there to leave me
Just immediate abandonment

 

[Puffy]

Firstly, yes it works. Secondly, hip-hop as a genre is something I have never properly gotten in to so I am likely quite biased. I don't know what the clubs are like where you are but I'd love to see the reaction from people to the lyrics as they are perhaps a bit more 'avant-garde' than what most are used to! Either way I liked the style/ backing music - I am not sure if it is just that you havn't made the music yet but I didn't think the second verse to Abandonment worked without any background music - but just my two cents.

 

[Words]

Interesting. I enjoy rap a little bit myself but I prefer ones that are rhythmically progressive and those with really consistent yet elaborate beats. And I agree with puffy, I think the background music on the second verse would generally be appreciated.

As for the lyrics, I did not understand most of them. But "Fuck your values" at the end of anomie gave me some thoughts. For some reason, because I usually cannot follow the words in rap music, the beat is more emphasized in evaluation.

 

[Agent Intellect]

The second verse to abandonment is something I wrote between classes at school, and it wasn't written to any particular beat. I tried reformatting the lyrics a bit to make it fit, but I couldn't do it without compromising the 'message' too much, so I decided to just A Capella it.

The beats were not made by me (I don't have the equipment for that). I have a bunch of beats from internet producers on my computer that I've had around since like 2001. Using Cool Edit Pro I can cut the beats up as much as I want though.

 

[AlisaD]

I'd like it more if you yelled. Shouted. Screamed.

 

[kantor1003]

Your voice is clipping I believe. How do you record? You should have tried reducing the output, adjusting levels as optimally as you can, before doing the whole take.
Anyways, sounded like you had difficulty timing wise on the first tune. The second one is easier, I believe, to get to swing, considering it having a more firm downbeat.
I am not into rap, but I would say to work more on your timing, and also try to mix it up more rythmically. Seeing how static the rythm section generally is in this kind of music, you have a lot of room to play around.

 

[Philosophyking87]

First of all, I enjoy hip hop.
Secondly, I enjoy lyrics by intellectual people.
Third, the songs sound pretty good. Nice flow and whatnot.
Nicely done, AI.