You better shake your asses with this one! Goddamn

[TheManBeyond]

YOU INTP goddamn, if i can't get that done all my efforts have been in vain.
YEAH i haven't recorded the amazing lyrics i have for this one because i suck at singing and i'm still practing. The song is about being a worthless piece of shit like a spectre.

https://soundcloud.com/atrasalviejo56/mascara-demo-instrumental

I'm also changing my avatar for the sake of POWER

 

[onesteptwostep]

...I can definately tell that you have Jrock influences.

I love the feel of urgency and the dynamic range created by the progressions- but here are some constructive critisisms regardless

I felt like there could be additonal progressions in the music when I first heard it. Like on 0:21 if there was another progression on a higher octave with twice the tempo it woulda been a coup de grace. The inflections in the 4th repetition gets a little too apparent once you get into somewhere of the middle of the song I think. I think maybe changing it up to the 3rd first might be a good mixup. These were all apparent when I first heard it, but after hearding it like the 2nd time the anticipation of inflections sort of faded away for me. Starting from 1:55 I think the down/ups could be changed into fast 'buzz' or a down/up/down (3 hits on the strings). The ending I think would be good with just a sudden cut rather than a fade, to wrap up the song suddenly, just like how it opened up. That is all. :]

You got a fan from that piece btw. (b'')b

 

[TheManBeyond]

thanks yo!

:P